This person’s greatest love was “freedom and myself.”
Their greatest fear was being trapped forever as a constant caretaker, and never living their own dreams.
I don’t want to write too much about this one, since I think it deserves to speak for itself…
~
Since writing it, I’ve caught myself mumbling “know me well…” under my breath more than once — typically while doing mundane tasks like carrying the groceries and things like that.
Very nice, Hasse. Indeed I think you conveyed enough in the poem to allow the idea to speak for itself. I think it's something we all consider at some point. My favorite lines:
Glad you feel that way, James. My biggest concern was that I didn't want to define who/what the narrator is in this -- it would kind of go against the spirit of the whole poem. Sometimes it's best to shut up, hehe.
Thank you. Of my poems published so far, this one is probably my personal favorite!
This person’s greatest love was “freedom and myself.”
Their greatest fear was being trapped forever as a constant caretaker, and never living their own dreams.
I don’t want to write too much about this one, since I think it deserves to speak for itself…
~
Since writing it, I’ve caught myself mumbling “know me well…” under my breath more than once — typically while doing mundane tasks like carrying the groceries and things like that.
I don’t mind it.
~
Take care!
— Hasse
Very nice, Hasse. Indeed I think you conveyed enough in the poem to allow the idea to speak for itself. I think it's something we all consider at some point. My favorite lines:
Bring me in! Unlock the hatch
to where your treasures are,
and here, I shall exist,
until the final line.
Glad you feel that way, James. My biggest concern was that I didn't want to define who/what the narrator is in this -- it would kind of go against the spirit of the whole poem. Sometimes it's best to shut up, hehe.
Thank you. Of my poems published so far, this one is probably my personal favorite!
Ah! hear closely! I hear this voice in me. Lovely lovely expression!
Hehe. I hear it too! Thank you, Som!